World Building Expansion in Onyx Storm

I have had to percolate my thoughts on Onyx Storm for several weeks. I read the last chapter on July 31st. The next day I posted a thread that said, “I just finished Onyx Storm and I am not okay”. Then I finally posted my review on Goodreads on August 3rd. And after that, I still didn’t know how I wanted to write a positive analysis for my blog because the end absolutely destroyed me. 

And I finally figured out why I’ve been struggling: 1. I thought Onyx Storm was the final book in the series for the first half of reading it, and then my hair stylist told me there’s going to be more. 2. The cliffhanger ending is too hard (for me) when the next book isn’t out yet.

Both of those issues can be pushed aside for an analysis of the actual story. So let’s dive in.

Representation

This has been going on since the first book. I really like Rebecca Yarros’s way of introducing a character’s sexual orientation, gender identity, and disability. My favorite example is with a side character whose preferred pronouns are they/them. I apologize to the super fans, but I can’t remember this character’s name. They aren’t one of the primary side characters because they aren’t on Violet’s squad, and I don’t think they’re in Violet’s wing. Whenever they are in a scene, Violet’s inner dialogue and actual dialogue call the character they/them without a big info dump on why, nor is there a side plot where other characters have to learn to accept that character as they identify themselves. They just simply exist and the acceptance was already part of the culture before page 1 of book 1. 

We see something similar with Jessinia. She is deaf. And from the moment we meet her, Violet already knows sign language. In fact, the majority of the characters know sign language, implying that it is a cultural expectation in most provinces.

Gay and lesbian characters also don’t have a coming out plot. They just simply are there and we learn their identity when they get a love interest. Which is something I’m attempting in my own writing as well. 

Several characters are supposedly persons of color, but I have to admit I didn’t catch on to Rebecca Yarros’s hints and descriptions of said characters. The only two that were obvious to me were Xaden and Bodhi. But I’m going to give her grace because I’m also still learning how to let my readers know my characters’ race in an obvious but still respectful way. The racial issues that are written into the story are more about regional differences, not skin colors. We see this a lot in modern fantasy world building, and I personally like it. It’s something I’m trying to do in my own writing as well: put in diverse characters, but the issues they face don’t surround their skin color.

Disabled characters seem to be the one exception to the culture of Navarre. Violet was born disabled, and she’s raised to believe her disability will never allow her to be a dragon rider. Which, if you’ve read the first book, you know how she overcomes that. Now, one could argue that society itself has no problems with disabled people in Navarre, they just can’t be dragon riders. But I would argue back that dragon riders are considered the elite of the kingdom, so yes, society as whole probably does look down on the disabled. We see another character, Sawyer, become disabled during a major battle at the end of the second book, and he spends the third book learning to accept his new limitations and readjusting his riding style so he can still ride his dragon and fight – just like Xaden and Tairn did for Violet. 

Overall, I think what Rebecca Yarros is doing with representation in this series is a good step toward representation in fantasy stories. I can’t speak for any of those communities because I don’t belong to any of them. I have seen some criticisms from readers who belong to those communities, so she’s not doing it perfectly. But I do think she deserves props for trying, and will hopefully inspire other authors who can learn from her example and the criticisms in their own writing. 

Government Corruption

It’s hinted very early in Fourth Wing that the Kingdom of Navarre is corrupt, and has been for centuries. What I wasn’t prepared for was the revelation that all the kingdoms Violet and Quest Squad visit are just as corrupt. It definitely made the quest for the Irids frustrating. However, we do get to learn about several other kingdoms with their people, customs, and history. I hope we get to return to some of them in the remaining books. I also think it was really intriguing to make every government have some form of corruption. It definitely made the governments more realistic and applicable to our human world.  

Travel Plot

As mentioned above, the entirety of Onyx Storm is them traveling around trying to find where the Irid dragons ended up moving to and asking other kingdoms for help fighting the Venin. And like stated above, the results are very disappointing for Violet. This is not a new storytelling technique, but it’s usually done in a smaller chunk of the book, not the entire book. At first, I was really frustrated and didn’t feel like I read a complete story. But here’s the thing: Rebecca Yarros already showed us in the previous two books that this is the plotting style for this series. A lot of craziness happens and then we end the book on a huge cliffhanger. And as mentioned above, all of that craziness introduced us to several new communities, and poses the question: Is Navarre truly the villain? Or are all the governments villainous and selfish in their own ways?

Only one resolution

There are a lot of tensions going on throughout Onyx Storm: Violet and Xaden vs. General Aetos, Violet and Xaden vs. Theophanie, characters popping up all over the place with second signets, etc. And at the end of Onyx Storm, only one resolution happens. Which was quite strategic. Because of course I want to know what’s going to happen to everyone who showed off their second signet. Of course I want to know if General Aetos will either “come to Jesus” or if he’s going to die still being an asshole. I want to know more about Violet’s hair, because after teasing us for three books about how it’s so unique, the tidbit we got in this book was not enough to cleanse my palatte.

So, yeah. I’ll be purchasing the fourth book because I simply need to know what happens. Also I love Xaden and Violet.

In the meantime, I have a YA fantasy tangent to go on. 

When expectations are challenged: Fourth Wing

A year ago, I wrote about my journey as a reader to loving flawed characters and appreciating how their flaws shape the story. And since then, I’ve been more aware of how a story can challenge the reader regarding their belief about the real world or literary expectations for specific genres and character types. I recently had a wonderful experience being challenged by Fourth Wing by Rebecca Yarros. 

How corrupt governments are viewed by the protagonist

The first chapter already had me raising my eyebrows. It didn’t make any sense to me why the government would set up tests and challenges that could kill a citizen who is willingly trying to be part of the military. Right away my question was, “Why don’t they have some sort of magical something to catch the people who fall from the parapet so that they can pick a different career since they aren’t cut out to be a dragon rider?” And it made even less sense that those who made it into the rider’s quadrant were not only allowed but encouraged to kill their classmates. Once again, why isn’t something set up to protect their lives, but they can still fail and be sent back to civilian life? This violent and deadly setup was my first major clue that the government was corrupt.

The next early clue is the fact that children of separatists (a rebellion/secession that happened before the story started) are forced to walk the parapet and to [hopefully] die in the rider’s quadrant, though many make it through, like Xaden, Imogen, Garrick, and Liam. 

But where I got stuck was Violet’s (the main character) acceptance that this is how it is. She doesn’t question it. She doesn’t want to be part of it herself, but she doesn’t view it as bad or evil, just not for her. And it took her a long time to start to question what was going on. It was very frustrating for me because there was a very clear Hunger Games vibe with many of the training, tests, and games that the riders do to strengthen themselves for war. And because of that, I erroneously expected Violet to be more like Katniss in knowing right off the bat that her government is awful.

But Violet doesn’t come from an oppressed part of the kingdom. She’s moved around as a “military brat” with her mom rising in fame and power as a war general. So, of course she’ll have a different view of things. It’s not how she starts, it’s how she ends. And in the end, Violet accepts the truth.  

Whose job is it to flirt in fiction?

Violet and Xaden are both dealing with enemies-to-lovers and forbidden love tensions that make them fight their attraction toward one another for the first three-quarters of the book. Before they give in to their feelings, the reader gets 300 pages of Violet’s inner thoughts about how beautiful, muscley, and hot Xaden is. And at first, it was a little cringe for me. 

Tangent time: I was in high school when Twilight came out, and I fell hard for that series. My dance coach decided to read the first book because all of us teenage girls were constantly talking about it. Her response: “I got really bored of Bella constantly moaning about how ‘he’s so hot, I can’t stop thinking about him.’” It made me laugh then, and it still makes me laugh now. 

Anyway, that’s how I felt being in Violet’s thoughts about Xaden when it appeared he didn’t feel it back, yet. (Keyword: appeared) 

So, Violet and Xaden eventually give in to their attraction and they have two kisses before they finally do the deed. After that, Xaden doesn’t quite say “this was a mistake” (thank Gods), but he does say they’re not going to be in an official relationship. Violet decides she has more self-respect than to be his dirty little secret, so she decides they won’t have anymore physical relations if they aren’t going to also have an emotional relationship. Xaden respects her boundaries, though he’s confident he can break through them again. During their “dry spell”, Violet continuously reminds Xaden how great they could be together and how she’s certain he does feel something for her. 

During these moments I felt second-hand embarrassment for Violet. She was coming off as clingy and crazy.

But then I had a realization and metaphorically slapped myself in the face. If Violet was a male character, all of her thoughts about Xaden being beautiful and her attempts to convince Xaden to give them a try would be viewed as cute and expected for a romance. I realized I was still stuck in the society I had grown up in: the boy chases the girl, the girl does not chase the boy. 

And I got to thinking about my own relationship. I offered my number to my husband first. I asked him on a date first. 

So in our 21st Century of trying to retain equal rights: girls can chase the relationship if they’re comfortable doing that. And Xaden loves Violet’s confidence. 😉    

Cliff Hangers 

Rebecca Yarros ends almost every single chapter on various levels of a cliffhanger. Which writers have been strongly encouraged to do. You want the reader to NOT pause at the end of the chapter. But I’m not the kind of reader that needs every chapter to end that way. When the story is amazing, I don’t need a cliff hanger to convince me to keep reading. And Fourth Wing is more than good enough on its own. I’m happy when a chapter ends with temporary breaths of relief, resignation, or something more calming. In addition to that, several cliff hangers didn’t lead into the next chapter. The scene would skip several hours, days, and sometimes weeks. So It was a little frustrating when that happened. In my opinion, a cliffhanger should only happen if the next chapter starts where the previous chapter left off.

At the same time, I think I understand why Rebecca Yarros wrote Fourth Wing this way. This book takes place over the course of an entire calendar year, and we have to go through action packed military college scenes mixed with spicy romance. There was a lot to cover, and the book is already incredibly long, so some things did need to be skipped over and left up to the reader’s imagination or summarized through telling. 

Overall, Fourth Wing was a wild ride that I enjoyed immensely. In fact, I’m so hooked on Violet’s journey, that I moved the sequel, Iron Flame, to the top of my tbr list. I’m 300 pages in and can’t wait to write my analysis for that one.

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